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i strive for true happiness
i feel it's impossible
i don't smile any more
never truly, always forced
is happiness possible
to obtain, experience?
is what i want... even real?
recently i feel like i have not been smiling as much as i used to...i have just been really down recently...i have never really felt this down for this long before... i just feel like laying down with someone i truly love and crying in their arms until i fall asleep...i guess...now that im single i feel that im even more alone then i was, even though im the one that broke it off and i always complained, saying i wanted to be single agian (not to her)...*sigh*...i guess i will never find my Souta (a character in my story always let his girlfriend cry in his arms) especaily when i keep pushing the people i date away... i hate me

i own this is mine
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lolgrace14 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Professional Artist
I share your pain. I also strive happiness as well.
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LearningEverMore Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
great poem, and it breaks my heart that you aren't happy...
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Evyleon Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I agree, it asks a very good question. I feel it is a little too short and linear. If you can put in free and blank verse, make it more free flowing. For example:

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Not necessarily to that extent, but I personally think poetry can have more impact if it's more flowing and a little longer. Use single lines with single words those work nicely.

But a very good poem nonetheless.
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vadess40 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2011
Good poem and asks a very good question.
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